X-Received: by 10.101.88.140 with SMTP id d12mr19606111pgu.22.1505661117814; Sun, 17 Sep 2017 08:11:57 -0700 (PDT) X-Received: by 10.31.151.65 with SMTP id z62mr354880vkd.19.1505661117641; Sun, 17 Sep 2017 08:11:57 -0700 (PDT) Path: ...!paganini.bofh.team!weretis.net!feeder6.news.weretis.net!feeder.usenetexpress.com!feeder-in1.iad1.usenetexpress.com!border1.nntp.dca1.giganews.com!nntp.giganews.com!126no495163itl.0!news-out.google.com!x15ni614qth.1!nntp.google.com!b1no1670165qtc.1!postnews.google.com!glegroupsg2000goo.googlegroups.com!not-for-mail Newsgroups: alt.arts.poetry.comments Date: Sun, 17 Sep 2017 08:11:57 -0700 (PDT) In-Reply-To: <863b8f6c-679a-4f19-a64a-ebf043ee021e@googlegroups.com> Complaints-To: groups-abuse@google.com Injection-Info: glegroupsg2000goo.googlegroups.com; posting-host=207.228.78.218; posting-account=PutYawoAAACderjGIunMmFFQCezAWsEx NNTP-Posting-Host: 207.228.78.218 References: <8d12a342-e31d-4ca7-ada5-481dd8aa8d04@googlegroups.com> <96b0c89c-bfb9-451a-8a08-603c7ec338c3@googlegroups.com> <25966dfd-b917-4ece-b720-8499bc1249bc@googlegroups.com> <80b57a72-6456-4443-b8d2-262cc2cd7a44@googlegroups.com> <6fe89a99-a120-4097-829a-46114f023a97@googlegroups.com> <62e6ea23-e45e-4db2-8dc3-1cd5c7c1770f@googlegroups.com> <863b8f6c-679a-4f19-a64a-ebf043ee021e@googlegroups.com> User-Agent: G2/1.0 MIME-Version: 1.0 Message-ID: <1778821b-73f0-425c-9256-b8bc2a7ecb83@googlegroups.com> Subject: Re: Sunday Sampler...9/17/17..post on the topic "Death" suggested by Michael.. From: Peace Injection-Date: Sun, 17 Sep 2017 15:11:57 +0000 Content-Type: text/plain; charset="UTF-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Lines: 53 On Sunday, September 17, 2017 at 8:48:30 AM UTC-6, Richard Oakley wrote: > On Sunday, September 17, 2017 at 10:21:16 AM UTC-4, Peace wrote: > > On Sunday, September 17, 2017 at 8:09:46 AM UTC-6, Richard Oakley wrote= : > > > On Sunday, September 17, 2017 at 9:34:40 AM UTC-4, Peace wrote: > > > > Final Flight > > > >=20 > > >=20 > > > The elder saw me creep inside,=20 > > > when there was nothing left to hide. > > > A bucking horse=E2=80=94both wild and free, =20 > > > Came to steal the sweet child in me.=20 > > >=20 > > > Mom was weeping, though Dad was stern,=20 > > > children left their young hearts to burn.=20 > > > Tears drying with loss of breath > > > there standing, so close to death.=20 > > >=20 > > > I couldn't get out of it=E2=80=99s way,=20 > > > and so now I will have to stay > > > inside a box, wrapped up too tight, > > > prepared to take my final flight.=20 > > >=20 > > >=20 > > > > Peace > > >=20 > > > Hey, I only did this edit cause I liked where > > > you were heading and want to help. > > >=20 > > > These changes are one of many, many=20 > > > possibilities. Peace, please that this as > > > such. > > >=20 > > > Peace, > > > r. > >=20 > > Thanks, it's cleaner and more on point. >=20 > Well, it still has problems, but has a good horse > sense about it, maybe you could build on that > horse=3Ddeath metaphor? >=20 > r. The original poem came out as a three stanza ABBCDD Which is a bit more lyrical than=20 AABB When I was a child, I had a near death experience.=20 My sister and I were in with the horses and the dog started to chase them. One of them started to buck and it kicked me on my head. My family and doct= ors told me that I was lucky to be alive.=20 I also used it, to metaphorically to describe what it feels like to be=20 A child of sexual abuse.=20