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From: will.dockery@gmail.com (W.Dockery)
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Subject: Re: New poem by Rachel
Date: Wed, 29 Jan 2025 21:25:09 +0000
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% wrote:

> General-Zod wrote:
>> cheesetray wrote:
>>>
>>>
>>>> Operation Bloodless
>>>> (response to nancy)
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> phonemes charging
>>>> collected army
>>>> of hungry lit sounds
>>>> burst forth, bearing sharp swords, assault of
>>>> blades flashing, and slashing
>>>> thorny-armed terrorists
>>>> wielding surgical lasers sabres which beam and mock
>>>> mirror and swipe
>>>> with calculated precision
>>>> they slice
>>>> and cut deep, into rough stale banks of human brain joined at river’s
>>>> edge
>>>>
>>>> rogue militant mission of growling stomach stampede
>>>> a serial procession divine particle cascade of raging cowman vomit
>>>> spurs rote streams spinning through desolate indifferent swampland
>>>> abused soil of sandy desert and abandoned dirt
>>>> a mounted scalding attack
>>>> led by sticky torches burning
>>>> deep below the coordinates
>>>> of creation’s ground zero
>>>> scouring petrified bovine dung and buried leaves
>>>> which are now all choking…
>>>> on the smoke
>>>> of viper venom
>>>>
>>>> unraveling threads recoiling
>>>> ravaged in instant shock
>>>> from this suffocating heat
>>>> surge of liquid flame loosed on stung conscience by the blind
>>>> pricking piercing of mercenaries
>>>> employed en masse for merciless molecular mutilation
>>>>
>>>> designer rockets delegating a multi-millennial build-up of
>>>> manufactured homeland waste from savage cactus fire
>>>> send toxic flares...
>>>> their crafted arrows, carrying chemicals from forsaken high voltage
>>>> electric needles
>>>> pound across peals of vaulted sky
>>>> striking embowed short-circuited professional agents of authority
>>>> meticulously marking mapped out morals for these ground
>>>> controlled messenger vehicles
>>>> of rectifying mystery spikes and metaphysics
>>>> from spines which rattle and hiss
>>>> they surround and rain down
>>>> in unison, upon unsuspecting shaking venison victims
>>>> injections of pacifying poison numb and shrink the dyed agar
>>>> membranes of lifeless dumb prisoners of names
>>>> all rounded up and stranded
>>>> silos of stentorian acid stinging and singeing their neural skins
>>>> escorting them, in their season to carefully doctored death time
>>>> notarized, inside the charred detritus compost of collective mind
>>>>
>>>> blackened scarred ego
>>>> cracks and is momently ruptured by young shoots of courage
>>>> fiery rods sent to grasp and bloom
>>>> in unknown far-off fertile fields
>>>> unearthed by vindicated corporation of constructed confusion
>>>> and the ominous cries of inflexible internalized coincidence
>>>>
>>>> rays of pitched sparks fly, offering up
>>>> new memory, darkly etched under quivering animal moonlight
>>>> recorded holy chains of ancient blood
>>>> carved out of the steely milk-white night and seeping...into art strokes
>>>> of my soul’s last breath
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> רחל
>>>> 10.15.23
>>>> for SAM
>>
>> Again Rachel... Excellent poem on first read..!
>  >
>  >
> play your cards right

Troll much, %?

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