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From: will.dockery@gmail.com (W.Dockery)
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Subject: Re: Sunglass / Will Dockery
Date: Wed, 21 May 2025 19:50:18 +0000
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General-Zod wrote:

> Will Dockery wrote:
>>
>>>>> Sunglass
>>>>>
>>>>> This battered old shell looks like a death mask.
>>>>>
>>>>> Lucky or not I shall wear it as I walk into Phenix City. Though I
>>>>> cheated in my gambling I wound up broke anyway.
>>>>>
>>>>> And I come, and I pay the zombie whores and walking dead. While the
>>>>> dark lady in sunglasses takes the halo from his clay head.
>>>>>
>>>>> One more trip over that bridge to the kissing booth. Where there's
>>>>> smoke there may be fire and this time I got burned.
>>>>>
>>>>> I walk this beach at midnight like a zen dharma beach bum. And I am
>>>>> saved, and I turn.
>>>>>
>>>>> I watch the drunken poets, and my lawyer. While the dark lady in
>>>>> sunglasses takes the halo from his clay head.
>>>>>
>>>>> -Will Dockery
>
>> Comments and critique on the poem are welcome.
>
> One more read, quite liked ---.

Good afternoon, thanks again.