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From: Gary McGath <garym@mcgath.com>
Newsgroups: rec.music.filk
Subject: Re: New filk
Date: Sat, 18 Jan 2025 21:10:39 -0500
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On 1/18/25 5:52 PM, Arthur T. wrote:
> If there's anyone left here, I'd like suggestions for a title.
> Similarly, even I have problems keeping scansion on the third line of
> the chorus, so let me know how it works for you.
> 
> ttto: Chim Chim Cheree by Richard M. Sherman and Robert B. Sherman
> 
>    Wake nor asleep, but seems that you're somewhere between
>    You find you're aware of things half-way unseen
>    While in this state you can't decide if they are real
>    And you can't tell whether you feel what you feel
>    So what does it hide; what does it reveal?

The scansion on the chorus seems fine to me. The words are a little 
tricky to sing, but a moderately good singer should be able to handle 
them with some practice, perhaps slowing the tempo down a hair from the 
original song.

-- 
Gary McGath    http://www.mcgath.com